Home > hindi > Poem > Poetry > Pal – A Tanka Poem Pal – A Tanka Poem Shweta Dave June 7, 20152015-06-07T17:16:42+00:002015-06-07T17:16:42+00:00 hindi, Poem, Poetry 65 Comments Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7). While I would love to attempt this in English as well, however my first attempt is in Hindi 🙂 Tweet Pin It About The Author shweta.dave09 65 Comments June 8, 2015 findingnimi As usual masttt 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you 🙂 Reply June 8, 2015 Bhavikk Shah First attempt but wonderful outcome great I liked it.. 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Bhavikk, glad you liked it 🙂 Reply June 8, 2015 Saru Bus dil ko chho gaye. Behad sundar. This is best from what I’ve read on your blog. Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave And that’s a super compliment, really happy you liked it Saru 🙂 Reply June 8, 2015 Ravish Mani Quite the mystic, especially the last line. 🙂 Well, how do you count syllables in Hindi? Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave not possible through apps to count the syllables, its same problem with Hindi Haikus Ravish. Glad you liked it 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Anoop I miss watching the horizon and whiling away time 🙁 Wonderful lines. Reminds me of quite a few things that we miss doing in life. Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave You miss Marine Drive or Kochi fishing nets….I am good till the time i sit by the sea side or river bed…looking aimlessly at it the waves as the sun shines glittering it 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 MP UPPAL Touching! Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Uppalji 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 sreedhar Bhattaram Truly Classic and heart touching Poetical Lines Shweta! I can just understand the meaning in full even though I’m not so good at Hindi… Well expressed! Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you sir, it feels so nice that you attempted to understand the poem….you made my day!! Reply June 9, 2015 Teny Nice 🙂 I will surely wait for the English one 😀 Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Why do I feel like torturing you more with Hindi verses 🙂 ok kidding…words translated for you Teny…. I stand my your side O’sea With a hope An attempt to fathom the horizon Long wait of moments that would never return! Hope this was easier now 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Teny I did get the meaning, but this one surely gives a better feeling for me 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Deepak Amembal Very beautifully versed!! Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Deepak ji 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Somali K Chakrabarti Chah un palon ki joh kabhi lautkar nahi aane wale hai…..beautiful Shweta. Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave bilkul Somali….moments is what makes life isn’t it 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Somali K Chakrabarti Beetein hue lamhe, unki yaadein, Bichade dost aur bhoole wadein Ab aap log itna achcha likhoge toh aur log bhi likhne ko inspire honge na. 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Vinay Nagaraju Nice one Shweta. It is very rare that I get to understand a Hindi poem and I am really glad I could understand this one.. It has come out really well 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave 🙂 oh my you tried is a big thing Vinay, super happy you liked it 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 yogi saraswat शानदार Reply June 9, 2015 Shweta Dave Shukriya Yogiji 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Kal Beautifully presented Shweta 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you 🙂 Reply June 9, 2015 Purba Chakraborty This is so beautiful 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thanks Purba 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 MS Mahwar Beautiful! Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Madhusudan 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 Datta Ghosh There are times when you wake up in the morning and feel pensively happy. While you sip tea and go through the poems a friend has written, there is a serene smile….Thank you for the smile, words are not enough to describe how the lines touched me. 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave When people ask me what satisfies you after writing, its the creation of course but more its this….a smile I bring to my friend’s face, I feel content 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 sweta nice words….reflects a quite and contemplative mood Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Sweta 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 Amit Agarwal नाज़ुक जज़्बा, बेहतरीन अभिव्यक्ति, अभिनन्दन श्वेता !! Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Shukriya Amitji, aapki saraahna sarvopariya hai 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 cifarshayar khoobsurat shabdo se nirmit khoobsurat rachna, effective Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Shukriya Cifar, jab ek kavi se prashansa mile toh baat hi kuch aur hoti hai 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 Fayaz Pasha Very beautifully penned Shweta. Wo pal kabhi nahin lautnewaale jo beeth gaye. Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave sahi kaha Fayaz :). Bus un lamhon ko samet len jab woh paas hain 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 abhi_bangal You are always a very genius when it comes to writing such kind of poems. Just beautiful…. Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Abhijit, really happy you liked it 🙂 Reply June 10, 2015 Alok Singhal Amazing work, love your Hindi expressions 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Alok, happy happy you liked them 🙂 Reply June 11, 2015 Shanx One of the most beautiful work of yours and splendid Ananya 🙂 Love these lines. They carry the beauty yet so vividly tell volumes of emotions and just flow. Superb job here! Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thanks Shashank, you made my day, well you did tell me its one of my best work par my best is yet to come….my best comes when I am in India 🙂 Reply June 11, 2015 Rajeev Moothedath Beautiful lines! Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Rajeev ji 🙂 Reply June 11, 2015 Ashwath Though a greenhorn in hindi, this one’s got me interested.Nicely done Shweta Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave and am so glad it got you interested, promise stands stronger to my friends on English version of my poem henceforth 🙂 Reply June 12, 2015 Maitreni Mishra Lovely lines Shweta…so much did it remind me of the beautiful hindi proverb “Umeed pe duniya kayam hai” :’) Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave bilkul aas chhodni nahi chahiye Maitreni, thanks and super happy you liked it 🙂 Reply June 12, 2015 Indrani Tanka – it sounded like a embroidery style 🙂 here the words are embroidered well. 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave 🙂 Rightly said Indrani 🙂 Reply June 13, 2015 Deepa Gopal Sunil Awesome lines! I was reminded of an art form – Thangka! 🙂 Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Deepa, is it theTibetan Buddhist painting on cotton, or silk appliqué, usually depicting a Buddhist deity, scene, or mandala. Reply June 14, 2015 Ashish Kumar Ati sundar… Sankshipt panktiyon aur shabdon me dil ko choo lene wali bat kahi hai… Bahut sundar rachna. Reply June 16, 2015 Shweta Dave Shukriya Ashish, khushi hui ki aapko achhi lagi yeh rachna 🙂 Reply June 18, 2015 sunaina s ahluwalia Neat, clean and very descriptive! Reply July 7, 2015 Shweta Dave Thank you Sunaina, happy you like it 🙂 Reply June 25, 2015 Kokila Gupta Beautiful … I have seen Tanka paintings and its as good as those 🙂 Reply July 7, 2015 Shweta Dave Wow…it’s an honor to be compared with amazing art form of Tanka, thanks bestie 🙂 Reply July 18, 2015 Sushmita Malakar Hindi poetry, this simple and elegance, always touches my heart! Very simple and nice 🙂 Reply Leave a Reply Cancel reply Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *Name (required) Email (required) Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. 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